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    dots Submission Name: Edendots
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    Author: Scribner
    Elite Ratio:    2.3 - 131/134/18
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       My homage to the indigenous peoples of the Americas.


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    dotsEdendots
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    Since days uncounted
    man has searched for the region,
    that was a land of peace
    bearing the name of Eden.

    A land untainted
    by money or gree,
    where everyone was equal
    and the land was free.

    Eden laid in peace
    for thousands of years,
    until the whiteman came,
    and destroyed it with tears.

    The people of Eden
    fought for their land to be saved,
    but the whiteman was strong
    and a sad road was paved.

    The whiteman conquered
    and the land paid the cost,
    it's a sad thing to know,
    that Eden is lost.




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      Yes.....man made destruction makes me so sad too......
    My lil boys name is Eden : )
    I wonder if jesus weeps over what man has done or whether it was part of the plan.....

    I really enjoyed this write, its moving and makes ya think

    Lotsalove
    Nadine
    | Posted on 2006-04-27 00:00:00 | by lostspirit | [ Reply to This ]
      Well done...your work is simply, quite astounding. This is the kind of piece that comes from honesty. Glad to see that someone still is.

    ~ Niphredil
    | Posted on 2004-02-23 00:00:00 | by Niphredil | [ Reply to This ]
      Great piece of work. You continue to impress me.
    | Posted on 2004-02-01 00:00:00 | by DevilDinosaur | [ Reply to This ]
      Makes you think. Lol...makes me ashamed of being a "whiteman." Easy on the eyes and flows real well.
    | Posted on 2004-01-31 00:00:00 | by JKPS613 | [ Reply to This ]
      A good job done...
    | Posted on 2004-01-31 00:00:00 | by MzJae | [ Reply to This ]
      beautiful Native American Metaphor it makes my heart swell and tears fill my eyes
    | Posted on 2004-01-31 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]


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