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    dots Submission Name: Colordots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 420
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 564



    Description:
       just something i thought up. had a need to write something and decided this would wiork. appretiate my work!!!


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    dotsColordots
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    Oranges, blues, and purples,
    Colors flash before my eyes.
    Most of them are p[eaceful,
    But some still make me cry.
    Yellows fly before me,
    Quickly turning into red.
    Flames are in my body,
    And I'm wishing I were dead.
    What's with all the butterflies?
    Why is the world pink?
    And brown's a shitty color,
    And shit really does stink.
    Sprinkles of white, like snowflakes.
    Purity tainted by sin.
    The blackness of the shadows,
    In the darkness I will win.




    Submitted on 2007-02-17 16:56:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this one more then two others I've read by you. This seems much more substantial then those two. I think you have talent, and it shows through with works like this.
    | Posted on 2007-03-22 00:00:00 | by DeeBaby6389 | [ Reply to This ]
      This one made me smile and I thought it had a good rhymy tune like a limerick or something.

    I hope you are feeling better and keep on keepin on girl!

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share
    tif
    | Posted on 2007-02-22 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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