Description: I'm going to be honest i think this is really lame. These are the first lyrics i've ever written. Should i give it up already? I suck @ rhyming too. Well... any suggestions?
Best Friend, -------------------------------------------
Only the
Popular girl’s
“Best Friend”
But I’ve got some idea that
It’s come to an end
And if you think that there’s
Nothing wrong
You’ve been hanging around that bitch
Way too long
You haven’t thought about my vanished smile
You only gossip there
Since you’re in denial
Too bad you don’t see these tears inside
For all the times you’ve
Lied and you’ve lied
Stuck up bitch?
I know I am
Oh yeah! Of course I really
Give a damn
You can’t tease these eyes
Forevermore
Because they’re starting to get
So fucking sore
From looking at you…
From looking at you…
So maybe you’re the girl
That gets all the guys
But honey I don’t care
That’s not my life
And yes I’m trying to keep
The whole world out
Even though
I’ve been trying to shout
To you
All the way over there
So for now I’ll be
Behind closed, locked doors
But at least now
My mind can soar
Away from you…
Away from you…
I hate the way you
Played with my life
Like Lizzie Borden
With a knife
You stabbed and stabbed
And now I’m gone
I won’t bother you again
Good bye.
number one, it's hard to judge lyrics without hearing them sung.... number two, listen to the masses and don't be so hard on yourself. writing is a process. if we could all just pick up a pen and be fabulous there wouldn't be any fun in it. :)
Heh, don't be so hard on yourself! This is really good. The first verse was a little weak compared to the rest of it, IMO, but the rest is very strong.
Submission Name: Best Friend,
