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    dots Submission Name: Sweet Youthdots
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    Author: WD-40
    ASL Info:    21/F/Bangleby
    Elite Ratio:    0.95 - 206/72/10
    Words: 45
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1186
    Average Vote:    3.5000
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    dotsSweet Youthdots
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    Ah! The sweetness of youth...
    drowning vast oceans of innocence

    Im laying on a hill of grass
    eating chocolate
    dreaming at the skies

    My worst enemy lays beside me
    my best friend too
    gazing at the clouds

    Our hearts at peace




    Submitted on 2007-02-18 19:14:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      good could use more detail but good none the less
    | Posted on 2009-03-01 00:00:00 | by blackdemigod13 | [ Reply to This ]
      "My worst enemy lays beside me
    my best friend too
    gazing at the clouds"
    my favorite words, i guess what you want to tell is that you are close to them. But in yourth people fught too much i guess, so i think you wrote it because you want to show us that we have to be very close and helping each other. so a good write!
    thanks for sharing and i want to thank you for your comment!
    keep writing!
    have a nice day
    peace and love
    Victor
    | Posted on 2007-09-18 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a good poem, but i dont see how you could be at peace with your worst enemy. Maybe your x- worst enemy. But since i dont see how you can make x-worst enemy fit into a poem properly, you did better than i could have. good work. Could you PM me and tell me how it relates to youth though???? I really want to understand. Thanks.
    | Posted on 2007-06-01 00:00:00 | by isuperhero | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmmm. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .are your best friend and worst enemy one and the same?

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    SD
    | Posted on 2007-03-29 00:00:00 | by SilentDreams42 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a great poem! I can really relate to it I love the way you describe the person as your best friend and worst enemy... great<3
    | Posted on 2007-03-27 00:00:00 | by CaughtRedhanded | [ Reply to This ]
      Good write, im sure alot of people can relate to this.

    Kube.
    | Posted on 2007-03-20 00:00:00 | by Kube | [ Reply to This ]
      I LIKE IT, IT`S BETTER TO HAVE YOUR ENEMY BESIDE YOU SO YOU KNOW THAN BEHIND YOU; EVEN YOU BEST FRIENDS CAN BE YOU ENEMY, THE WORST IS FAMIELY THEY CAN CUT DEEPER THAN ANY ONE.
    | Posted on 2007-02-23 00:00:00 | by Bones | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the title! And I like the poem . Short and sweet. thanks for sharring!
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-02-19 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      To which friend are you playing with?
    Because in the scientific method you should at least have five friends.
    Everyone knows that. Not two. FIVE! That is 5th grade level stuff. only.


    By:
    G . Ucheia

    From The Fire Sword Dragon Ninja of The LFD.
    | Posted on 2007-02-18 00:00:00 | by Uthmaan | [ Reply to This ]


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