Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Snowdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: jennah
    ASL Info:    19/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    4.07 - 101/73/22
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 853
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 310



    Description:
       I wrote this one...last winter I think, but I really liked it and it seemed fitting considering we now have over 18 inches on the ground. I've tried to write more snow poems, but I kept coming back to this one.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsSnowdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Crystalline beauty,
    dazzling bright,
    painting the world
    a portrait of white.

    Sent from above,
    out of the sky,
    comes unannounced
    soft as a sigh.

    Merciful beauty
    covering all,
    nothing but absence
    and still it will fall.




    Submitted on 2007-02-18 20:08:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      very descriptive yet short--well done! The only thing I'd change is above to Above--but mayb that's not what you meant ; )
    | Posted on 2007-02-19 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
      Jenna this is one of my favorite poems you've written and if i'm not mistaken but its older than that cuz i published it in the school paper Junior year. Luv ya

    Sarah
    | Posted on 2007-02-19 00:00:00 | by Selene | [ Reply to This ]
      very nice! quality instead of quantity in the amount of words used, very good job and good imagery!

    w
    | Posted on 2007-02-19 00:00:00 | by scissorhands | [ Reply to This ]
      hey hi this is a beautiful pic for yor site
    i also like the picture you painted in words very nice

    sandman
    | Posted on 2007-02-19 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      Pretty, descriptive words. Paints a picture of a night near a lake where the ground is covered with snow. So simple yet, beautiful.
    | Posted on 2007-02-18 00:00:00 | by Foreseer | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    135308

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Ciggarettes written by Poetic_tragedy6
    Not the Devil, but the Wind written by endlessgame23
    Delicious Stews written by elephantasia
    A Worsening Effect written by Daniel Barlow
    FamiliarDemons ©™ written by kyserin
    Things They (Don't) Say written by TheStillSilence
    Compartments written by TheStillSilence
    None the Wiser written by endlessgame23
    Day 6 written by TheStillSilence
    Loop-di-Loop written by endlessgame23
    Florida's Autumn Solstice written by closetpoet
    Live In Between written by teika5
    no sky on the other side written by teika5
    A Sense Of Things written by Daniel Barlow
    Coversheets written by TheStillSilence
    To the Artist written by HisNameIsNoMore
    a leaf of shadow and edge written by Daniel Barlow
    Adoration written by TheStillSilence
    Twin Intercept written by Daniel Barlow
    untitled written by Outlaw
    Gaia written by endlessgame23
    A bit of Pain written by teika5
    Whispered written by endlessgame23
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    Starseed written by endlessgame23
    Relentless. The Visceral Fracture. written by Daniel Barlow
    Dream written by closetpoet
    Day 5 written by TheStillSilence
    Lie back & tan written by Daniel Barlow
    Johnny's Cock written by endlessgame23

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry