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    dots Submission Name: Snowdots

    Author: jennah
    ASL Info:    19/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    4.07 - 101/73/22
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 867
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       I wrote this one...last winter I think, but I really liked it and it seemed fitting considering we now have over 18 inches on the ground. I've tried to write more snow poems, but I kept coming back to this one.

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    Crystalline beauty,
    dazzling bright,
    painting the world
    a portrait of white.

    Sent from above,
    out of the sky,
    comes unannounced
    soft as a sigh.

    Merciful beauty
    covering all,
    nothing but absence
    and still it will fall.

    Submitted on 2007-02-18 20:08:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very descriptive yet short--well done! The only thing I'd change is above to Above--but mayb that's not what you meant ; )
    | Posted on 2007-02-19 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
      Jenna this is one of my favorite poems you've written and if i'm not mistaken but its older than that cuz i published it in the school paper Junior year. Luv ya

    | Posted on 2007-02-19 00:00:00 | by Selene | [ Reply to This ]
      very nice! quality instead of quantity in the amount of words used, very good job and good imagery!

    | Posted on 2007-02-19 00:00:00 | by scissorhands | [ Reply to This ]
      hey hi this is a beautiful pic for yor site
    i also like the picture you painted in words very nice

    | Posted on 2007-02-19 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      Pretty, descriptive words. Paints a picture of a night near a lake where the ground is covered with snow. So simple yet, beautiful.
    | Posted on 2007-02-18 00:00:00 | by Foreseer | [ Reply to This ]

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