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Author: Themissingshado
ASL Info:    22/male/Seattle
Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 23 /52 /32
Words: 166
Class/Type: Poetry /
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tell me what's worth it
i spill my heart
and this what i get.
i try so hard
but you keep stabbing me
right in the back.
last night
i stood in the rain
waiting for you
but you never show up.
so i went home
on way i played our song
but somehow it didn't have any meaning.
i took a detour
down 5th avenue.
Then through the woods to your house
and i knocked on your window.
i guess i must have startled you,
cause some guy with no clothes
ran out your back door.

Honestly tell me that you never loved me, and i was wasting time.

Let go,

Just let go.

Because sorry won't save us now.

Honestly tell me you two timing bitch, was i just wasting my time?

Tell me its over,

so i can move on.

my heart's was breaking for far too long...

Submitted on 2007-02-18 22:18:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  been there and felt so forsaken, just like you. sadly, it won't be the last time so remember how it feels. let it inspire you in as many ways as possible. that's people for ya! i liked the way you told a story of it, chronologically is very good and to the point. you posed questions we all want to hear but rarely get to hear what we want to hlep us move on after being hurt. overall a good write! keep it up!
| Posted on 2007-02-19 00:00:00 | by scissorhands | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey, I can feel you 'emotions' through your words and the way you put them in. I believe this is very hard. Raw feelings seeping through the poem. This added to the mood and attitude of the poem. The last line;

My heart's was breaking for far too long...

I feel you there. Don't forget to keep writing. :)
| Posted on 2007-02-18 00:00:00 | by Foreseer | [ Reply to This ]

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