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    dots Submission Name: Only Fragments of Truthdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 243
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
    Total Views: 619
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1593



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    dotsOnly Fragments of Truthdots
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    it is impossible to communicate
    you aren't even fucking listening

    shards of glass, impregnated by the opaque irrelevance of your CAPITALIZED words
    I wish I knew what the hell you were saying half the time
    time goes by
    so slowly
    and time
    can do

    you don't listen
    so much

    maybe it is because I cannot hear
    some drunken bafoon who is my
    I hope you don't mind
    that I put down into words

    how fucking lovely you are
    dear cousin
    I mostly hate you
    hate with the way you walk around

    standing above me
    condescending irrelevant turn of fucking phrase yo

    I almost devour this hate with the need to control my emotions

    tiny fragments of illusions, understanding...far from reaching my most tantalizing desires
    what do you know about desire?

    you haven't stop the abuse, you abuse yourself with love
    can't yousee
    that the pain she causes you gets you off
    I hope one day you'll understand
    that I don't understand
    but it is all part of an endless journey

    through time
    time
    goes by
    so slowly
    and time can do so fucking much


    the lights faded as she walked from the room, through the door frame one last bit of perspective was caught in the throat of the choked and coughing dust particles that reside on the reflection in the TV





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      Hmmm...interesting.

    Kind of jumped all over the place, too.

    I think I know who this is about...maybe not.

    you haven't stop the abuse, you abuse yourself with love
    can't yousee
    that the pain she causes you gets you off
    I hope one day you'll understand
    that I don't understand
    but it is all part of an endless journey


    That was interesting.

    tiny fragments of illusions, understanding...far from reaching my most tantalizing desires
    what do you know about desire?

    And that was my favorite...I like the way it reads...
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      super duper, dear...irreverant and contempory and lovely and totallly completely strange in an old fashion prose-y sort of way.....

    your the cat's pajamas!

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      Again, anothe good poem. You can feel the anguish and frustration as the words flow through your head. I actually started feeling pissed off when I started reading this.
    Yes, this poem probes the emotions a bit, I like it, and I think I will make it a favorite. Nice work.

    Sincerely,
    Martin
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by Draigon | [ Reply to This ]
      Again, anothe good poem. You can feel the anguish and frustration as the words flow through your head. I actually started feeling pissed off when I started reading this.
    Yes, this poem probes the emotions a bit, I like it, and I think I will make it a favorite. Nice work.

    Sincerely,
    Martin
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by Draigon | [ Reply to This ]
      well, impressive, you can actually feel the anger and frustration. by the way, you're not alone, i feel the same [censored] way sometimes... with a certain persona. but then again, when you feel angry, very angry, google "platypus lyrics". no one's been that angry.
    | Posted on 2007-02-19 00:00:00 | by ParLon | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow.
    I really enjoyed how you put in fragments of "Unchained Melody" and "your song" (and maybe some others i didn't catch). In my mind I kind of get this image of you trying to talk to someone, but they're tuning you out with music and tv.

    This was very descriptive in an all-over-the-place sort of way, but the disarray of it only lended to the whole situation you were trying to convey.
    | Posted on 2007-02-19 00:00:00 | by wovenwords | [ Reply to This ]
      That was cool as hell. I had trouble understanding it kuz i dont know the story.
    I will just have to think about some more.
    Im going to add it to my fav list.
    | Posted on 2007-02-19 00:00:00 | by Dark Romeo89 | [ Reply to This ]


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