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    dots Submission Name: That one momentdots
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    Author: Silver20G
    ASL Info:    28/M/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 158/109/25
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 739
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 977



    Description:
       Just on emotionally heavy day.
    Man I completely shutdown until nightfall.
    Then I heard this song and it reminded me of my High School sweet heart. So I wrote a poem about that person.


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    dotsThat one momentdots
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    Sometimes it is difficult to tell what is real.
    All I really know is "I love you" doesn't convey what I feel.
    I can tell you why I love you without hesitating.
    It's is time I stop fearing the truth.
    In my heart there is no debating.
    I feel lost when you are away. The solitude is blinding me.
    Please come to me and light my way. I need your love to see.
    I love you because you are what it feels to be right.
    I need you because you are the color in my life.
    I am still discovering to this day that you're so wonderful.
    It's not enough just to say that you are so beautiful.
    Tell me and please be honest if this feeling is mutual.
    If you decide on me I promise this will be continual.
    There are very few people who have been through what we've been through.
    So here is the moment where we say forever starting from today if you say I love you.




    Submitted on 2007-02-19 16:18:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Songs often take me back to a moment or person. This felt like it was written in the moment though. A good solid narrative on your feelings for her. I love when men write this type of poetry, because its a glimpse for me. Mine is not a word man, and cannot describe his feelings, so this is a peep for me, which I find intriguing. So thank you for sharing your heart.

    I saw Ron comment here, and it makes me sad. I miss that guy and his daily does of optimism and pep, and prayers for people he had never met. He and magnicat were dear friends and this site is not the same without them.
    ~Jan
    | Posted on 2015-04-07 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      This was written very well. It flowed nicely and the emotion was portrayed nicely. I can completely relate to this though I'm not optimistic about it. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

    »Haely«
    | Posted on 2008-09-08 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]
      awwwwwe that is so sweet. i understand how it feels to have feelings for someone, yet that person feels completely unattainable. great job, hope it works out...Joy
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      awwwwww. This is amazing. This person is really lucky.
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by black rose13 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very well worded write with an incredible amount of emotion
    One cant help but feel the Love you have for your soulmate
    Thank You for fighting for the freedom of every living breathing human being
    You are not just fighting for America
    America has a Heart and cares for other people in other countries
    You are showing that Heart for continually fighting for World Peace
    GOD BLESS YOU
    I will be Praying for you
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-02-19 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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