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    dots Submission Name: In the Enddots

    Author: heartless_
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 284/251/154
    Words: 246
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 537
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    dotsIn the Enddots

    In the end itís all the same
    All alone and confused seems to be the theme
    Moments of happiness gone away
    Faded are your dreams

    All hope once carried gone away
    With one single look from you,
    Never thinking this could be wrong
    Jumping in with no regard to the steepness

    Falling more and more to the end
    Only to realize itís all the same
    Heart breaking and crying
    Another poem to be written

    With all the heart breaks and poems
    You wonder why you ever go on
    Then the new light shines
    And you forget all the pain

    Only to be reminded once again
    That itís all the same in the end
    Heart broken and numb
    Unable to pick up the pen one more time

    Unable to function without them
    You begin to fall deeper and deeper
    While you cast aside friends
    And all that defines you

    Gone is your passion for writing
    Gone is your will to live
    And your hope for happiness
    For you know itís all the same in the end

    In the end your left with
    Broken bits of a person
    With the heart bruised over and over
    As they lay in a pool of their own
    Hopelessness with a pen and paper

    Only for it to read itís all the same in the end
    Not able to write any more then that
    They fade away into the darkness

    Submitted on 2007-02-19 16:31:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it, It stings but it's reality. I like your voice, lol, so to speak....or type
    | Posted on 2007-02-21 00:00:00 | by Lyrikz | [ Reply to This ]
      wow um depersing .... take me off of my natrual high why dont you ... it was ok i dont think it is one of your best but keep up the good work and hang in there
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by blue_angel | [ Reply to This ]
      ooh that hurts, it's bitter and sharp. but it's crisp and refreshing. kinda like coke acola. lol. i like this piece. the deep seeded pain that 'casts away your friends, and all that defines you' wonderful

    keep it up ... or down .

    | Posted on 2007-02-19 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]

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