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    dots Submission Name: Six Tankadots
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    Author: oixi
    ASL Info:    50/M/California
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 196/243/100
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       Here are six Tanka the Japanese form of poetry that combine nature with emotional themes in five lines of 5-7-5-7-7. These Tanka can be read as one poem.


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    dotsSix Tankadots
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    (I) Fight Excitement

    Water spouts on sea
    Perform with a Devil's dance
    Exciting to watch
    As tempers flare with great rage
    And people fight each other.


    (II) Old Age Viper

    Challenged by mongoose
    Certainly a predator
    Slithering through time
    Makes body ache and wrinkle
    Old age is quite depressing


    (III) Pain and Loss

    Stepped on sea urchin
    Poison races through the blood
    Can not stop the pain
    From loss of a loved one
    Can not go on any more


    (IV) Warmth of Love

    The sun shines brightly
    And sunlight kisses my cheek
    Warming rays feel good
    She smothers me with passion
    Love melts me like a puddle


    (V) Beautiful Dream

    Dragonfly buzzing
    Humming sound breaks the silence
    A scary swarm looms
    Yet I sleep peacefully there
    Dreaming of clear blue beauty


    (VI) Winter Joy Eating

    Still and cold in snow
    Deadness in the frozen white
    And I sing with joy
    Savoring delicious food
    Ecstacy from a fine meal






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