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    dots Submission Name: It's Not Your Faultdots
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    Author: black rose13
    ASL Info:    16/f/where do I live?
    Elite Ratio:    1.35 - 137/97/39
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    dotsIt's Not Your Faultdots
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    Just take a breath and tell me what's happened to you.
    I've never seen someone like this.

    You look in the mirror.
    Bruises all over your body.
    It's not your fault.

    It's so hard for you to trust anoyone now.
    I hug you and I can feel you shaking.

    You look in the mirror.
    Bruises all over your body.
    It's not your fault.

    As you walk into the room she drops the blood stained razor.
    All she wanted was it to be over.
    You watch as she falls to the ground.

    You look in the mirror.
    Bruises all over your body.
    (It's all over now)




    Submitted on 2007-02-19 18:39:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a very emotional and specific peice. To me it sounds like someone has been physically abused and they're blaming themselves, but you're telling them not to and they can't help that they've been abused. Very nice.
    | Posted on 2007-02-19 00:00:00 | by FarFromSanityy | [ Reply to This ]
      oh my, such powerful words.such deep insight.

    It's so hard for you to trust anyone now.
    I hug you and I can feel you shaking.


    is this from personal experiance? this was a deeply moving piece
    | Posted on 2007-02-19 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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