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~Save ourselves~


Author: darkwiccan14
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Corny song me and a friend came up with :P it goes great with our music since you cant hear us when we play! lol!


~Save ourselves~



Somewhere deep,
Somewhere horrid,
Gots lots of secrets to keep,
Like in some hidden storage.

Living in the darkness,
Till the light of day saves me.

Dont look at me that way,
Just wanna hear you say,

Just wanna hear you say you love me.

Dunno what to feel when i talk to you,
Dunno how to feel anymore by the ways.
Dunno how to breathe,
When i'm not around you.

Living in the darkness,
Till the light of day saves me.

Dont look at me that way,
Just wanna hear you say,

Just wanna hear you say you love me,
But quit taking my breathe away,
your nothing new,
what's wrong with me.

What's that voice that I hear?
Is it you? If it is,
It can't be beared.

Dunno what's wrong with us,
Dont have a clue,
And wont tell,
What the hell is wrong with us.

Living in the darkness,
Till the light of day saves us.

Just wanna hear you say,

Just wanna hear,

Us say.





Submitted on 2007-02-19 19:36:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Like you said, definitely corny. I liked it though. Clever.
| Posted on 2007-02-19 00:00:00 | by SuperbNova | [ Reply to This ]
  Is this about a recent beak up? Just curious. That's how it felt to me. I love your writing.
| Posted on 2007-02-19 00:00:00 | by black rose13 | [ Reply to This ]


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