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    dots Submission Name: Lost/AlternateTragedydots
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    Author: Vasudeva
    ASL Info:    43/M/irrelevant
    Elite Ratio:    5.12 - 24/27/23
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 520
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 479



    Description:
       I'm so glad we have spell-check now.
    The first "evil" has sexual overtones. The second evil relates to what a stay in a Nazi concentration camp might have been like, after time passes.
    And imagining using leasons learned in native lives to survive.
    Wondering why I had to suffer again (in the context of reincarnation).


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    dotsLost/AlternateTragedydots
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    Two evils, winter blowing, possessed me.
    Fruit hanging in the weather,
    Fire burning the bricks,
    Wind burning sticks.
    Losing myself to forget.

    Past life, snow, frozen air, wounded in the snow
    the unspeakable pain thrown out
    of the concentrations camps
    in the ice cold, where I have
    walked before,
    in native lives
    with body bowed down
    essentially
    again.






    Submitted on 2007-02-19 20:22:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very strong piece. I'm not sure I would have understood it without having read your description. It's interesting enough to warrant a deeper look. You might look at changing the title to tip the reader toward your intended theme. "concentrated distraction/evil" something like that.

    The concept of using pleasure to mask pain is vividly captured in the imagery here.

    enjoyed,
    DB
    | Posted on 2007-02-19 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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