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    dots Submission Name: A gleam of hopedots

    Author: Lover girl
    ASL Info:    17, female
    Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 83/54/24
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 590
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 726

       Dedicated to the man that saved my life and gave me a friendship that will never fail

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    dotsA gleam of hopedots

    Everything is changing
    The world around me shifts
    And I cant stop a single thing
    From losing hold its grip

    The things I know are leaving
    The memories are lost
    And even though Im crying
    A gleam of hope is tossed

    The hope wraps tight around me
    And saves me from my doom
    Then I look to see whos there
    And my eyes come to full bloom

    Emotions running wild
    My guard is ripped away
    My feet are swept up from me
    And my heart just pounds away

    This moment is forever
    And neer will I forget
    The night a friendship born
    And the sweet kiss on my lips

    Submitted on 2007-02-19 22:10:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      all i could say is that its good and keep up the creative poetry, ty
    | Posted on 2007-03-11 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]
      I was totally interpreting this to be a religous-type (if you like to use that dredded word) writing, until I read the last line. It kind of threw me for a loop, b/c of how I was perceiving it, but I think others will get it.
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]

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