A gleam of hope

Author: Lover girl ASL Info:    17, female Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 83 /54 /24 Words: 118

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A gleam of hope

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Everything is changing The world around me shifts And I can’t stop a single thing From losing hold it’s grip The things I know are leaving The memories are lost And even though I’m crying A gleam of hope is tossed The hope wraps tight around me And saves me from my doom Then I look to see who’s there And my eyes come to full bloom Emotions running wild My guard is ripped away My feet are swept up from me And my heart just pounds away This moment is forever And ne’er will I forget The night a friendship born And the sweet kiss on my lips

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all i could say is that its good and keep up the creative poetry, ty

| Posted on 2007-03-11 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]

I was totally interpreting this to be a religous-type (if you like to use that dredded word) writing, until I read the last line. It kind of threw me for a loop, b/c of how I was perceiving it, but I think others will get it. ~orange

| Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]

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