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A gleam of hope

Author: Lover girl
ASL Info:    17, female
Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 83 /54 /24
Words: 118
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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Dedicated to the man that saved my life and gave me a friendship that will never fail

A gleam of hope

Everything is changing
The world around me shifts
And I can’t stop a single thing
From losing hold it’s grip

The things I know are leaving
The memories are lost
And even though I’m crying
A gleam of hope is tossed

The hope wraps tight around me
And saves me from my doom
Then I look to see who’s there
And my eyes come to full bloom

Emotions running wild
My guard is ripped away
My feet are swept up from me
And my heart just pounds away

This moment is forever
And ne’er will I forget
The night a friendship born
And the sweet kiss on my lips

Submitted on 2007-02-19 22:10:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  all i could say is that its good and keep up the creative poetry, ty
| Posted on 2007-03-11 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]
  I was totally interpreting this to be a religous-type (if you like to use that dredded word) writing, until I read the last line. It kind of threw me for a loop, b/c of how I was perceiving it, but I think others will get it.
| Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]

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