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    dots Submission Name: Grain of Eternal Fladots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       title "Grain of Eternal Flame"


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    dotsGrain of Eternal Fladots
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    Like sand in an hour glass constant pouring,
    Every moment with you never boring.
    More and more I touch your face.
    Always knowing you’ll be there, but touching just in case.
    Now my arms are open, tears fill my face.
    Now the grains of sand filter out of space.
    Touching hands always remembering this perfect place.





    Submitted on 2004-01-31 13:21:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wondering about the title myself, but what a sweet write! I would add "is" to the second line, though, because I think it makes the rhythm a little messed up, but that all depends on how you read it.
    | Posted on 2004-01-31 00:00:00 | by JKPS613 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this too, but did your title get cut off? I really hate that. I've changed several due to that.
    | Posted on 2004-01-31 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]


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