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    dots Submission Name: The Perfect Endingdots
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    Author: kase
    ASL Info:    27, Winnipeg
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 169/398/234
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 1132
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 822



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    dotsThe Perfect Endingdots
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    Intertwined fingers connected through the gaps of hands
    Future promises of love and all the master plans
    Sitting on the grains of sand, staring at the setting sun
    Days seem like forever as they're all the perfect ones

    I've wiped away your tears, as you caressed gently across my soul
    Picking daisies from the neighbour's garden, even though we've become old
    Crying on each other's shoulder, forgetting and making memories
    Kisses on the cheek as i asked you to marry me

    I saw you walking down the aisle, accompanied by the biggest smile
    The grace emitting from your love stretches across for miles
    Face to face at the alter, nervous... waiting to say i do
    Then i awoke realizing i was only dreaming of you




    Submitted on 2007-02-19 22:53:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Umm what!? No way...lol the more I read of yours I realize we have a few traits in common too funny

    This is so endearing..truly wistful and happily ever after soothing. Then BLAM!!!

    Holy crap. Can I relate

    I have been in this predicament for most of my adult years. Silly, really but none the less true. He will never be mine again and yet he haunts my thoughts more then I care to admit. Tighter some years then other but whatev.


    Well written Kase

    | Posted on 2014-05-12 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      Your right :) I liked it a lot. thank you for suggesting it. its very beautiful.
    | Posted on 2013-09-29 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]
      damn i cant leave a good comment because my arm itches and i cant focus but i liked this even though the ending bummed me out somewhat
    | Posted on 2007-04-15 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      this is so sweet and sad... i like the way you ended it...so much feeling in it.

    AL
    | Posted on 2007-02-21 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      aww..this so cute!i love it,we never suspected that ending!good job
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]


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