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    dots Submission Name: My Sanitydots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Rant/Serious
    Total Views: 580
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    Bytes: 684



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       Lifes a Bitch!


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    dotsMy Sanitydots
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    My life is just like this line here...
    Can you not see that?
    Little by little
    This line
    It disappears
    Yet appears back in front of me
    Not wanting it
    But wanting it at the sametime..
    Pushing myself to love what I do not
    And hate what I do not hate..
    I wake to just go to work
    To get a call
    "Your mother's in the hosptile"
    I stay at a friends to recive a call
    "Your Grandmother has just passed"
    Start that line.. I'm Thinking
    Start what I know will be endless
    Start something I cannot finish...
    Yet it holds my sanity!




    Submitted on 2007-02-20 01:12:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this [censored] is pretty good
    i like the begginin ant the end
    | Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by TwistedMinded | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the way that the length of lines echoes the pattern of thought. You need to check your spelling though, however it could just be the odd typo (computers are evil for that). Anyway, well done. Fleur x
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by wilted_flower | [ Reply to This ]


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