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    dots Submission Name: Where am I? dots
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    Author: nolram
    ASL Info:    29/M
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 58/61/33
    Words: 196
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Fucking the drug on the side of a wall ripping a naked shirt off a clothed body in the pointless countryside or in a tenement hall.

    Where the fuck AM I?

    Humping the tree on top of my knee the earth drips with a sort of spontaneous prism of life.

    What the hell happened?

    Flying high above the valley where I died the sun cries but still shines brighter than light

    When was the last time anything made sense?

    Scar(r)ed beyond belief, life can be nothing but alternating periods of existence and absense of fright.

    How did I get here?

    Looking for someone to share the times, a little towards the heart I don't mind this line awaiting a journey to the firey pits of hell

    Who the fuck are you?

    Nothing static in a turbulent mind. Never settled everything we find with an urgency undefined.

    Why the fuck am I so confused?

    Speeding down an empty freeway the ambulances, helicopters and marked cars have given up. This one's neer going to get enough

    Where the fuck am I?





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      I always inhabited urban environments like an explorer, an intruder, an alien learning the tricks of surviving and not being noticed. Your poetry therefore hits me as an insight into the true denizens of towns, they live there and are energetically, fully, involved with each other. I don't suppose you get a comment from a rural alien very often! But that's my reaction; and it's because you write so clearly. I pick up on some issues that I never understood before. This is a bit remarkable!

    The clarity is worth so much more to your verse than the experiments in structure! However, I guess the one is merely natural, but the other is fun!
    | Posted on 2009-06-16 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]


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