Bad Bonnaroo Boomers by Jbills

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Submission Name: Bad Bonnaroo Boomers dots

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Author:	Jbills
ASL Info:	30/m/IL
Elite Ratio:	3.52 - 57/68/29
Words:	35

Class/Type:	Poetry/Longing
Total Views:	792
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	284

Description:
Shortie, but a goodie

Bad Bonnaroo Boomers dots

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Buried beneath abyss
Feelings aren’t felt;
Just to kiss

Who’s uncomfortable?
Peel my skin back
Feel my soul crack
Exposed;
And no one knows

Neurotransmitters numbing
All this time spent dumbing

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Nice dark poem, with heavily shadowed lines. Thanks for sharing.
| Posted on 2013-01-25 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.