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    dots Submission Name: Bad Bonnaroo Boomersdots
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    Author: Jbills
    ASL Info:    30/m/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 57/68/29
    Words: 35
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsBad Bonnaroo Boomersdots
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    Buried beneath abyss
    Feelings aren’t felt;
    Just to kiss

    Who’s uncomfortable?
    Peel my skin back
    Feel my soul crack
    Exposed;
    And no one knows

    Neurotransmitters numbing
    All this time spent dumbing




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      Nice dark poem, with heavily shadowed lines. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2013-01-25 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]


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