Deep-rooted Bush by Jbills

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Submission Name: Deep-rooted Bush dots

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Author:	Jbills
ASL Info:	30/m/IL
Elite Ratio:	3.52 - 57/68/29
Words:	75

Class/Type:	Poetry/Political
Total Views:	861
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Bytes:	495

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Deep-rooted Bush dots

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After we turned twenty
I believe we stalled
We found humor not funny
And answered when capitalism called

Divided we were
While we stood so sure

We the future
We the unprepared
We the over partied
And we the bold or scared
Have a task at hand

How do we tell our children?
Because of a careless man
This country will have to be turned around
By their over worked hand

Submitted on 2007-02-20 06:15:44 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I agree with A.C., not many people here tackle political issues. I personally don't, but I enjoy reading about them. I had a feeling this was about Bush, so I clicked it. I wasn't wrong
The metre is thrown here and there but that works to your advantage because you don't humdrum a poem of this nature into the reader. That's good, it makes them focus more on the topic at hand rather than the rhyme.
The sentiment is reciprocated. Keep writing.
Cheers
Azuire
| Posted on 2007-02-24 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
Food for thought.I like it.Not many people on here tackle political issues and I think this is done quite well.I was totally thrown by the title initially,I thought it might have sexual connotations but obviously I was wrong!The metre is a bit random but you include some subtle rhyming and it works.Totally agree with the sentiment also.
Cheers
A.C
| Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by Asakura Cowboy | [ Reply to This ]

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