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    dots Submission Name: Deep-rooted Bushdots

    Author: Jbills
    ASL Info:    30/m/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 57/68/29
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Political
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    dotsDeep-rooted Bushdots

    After we turned twenty
    I believe we stalled
    We found humor not funny
    And answered when capitalism called

    Divided we were
    While we stood so sure

    We the future
    We the unprepared
    We the over partied
    And we the bold or scared
    Have a task at hand

    How do we tell our children?
    Because of a careless man
    This country will have to be turned around
    By their over worked hand

    Submitted on 2007-02-20 06:15:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I agree with A.C., not many people here tackle political issues. I personally don't, but I enjoy reading about them. I had a feeling this was about Bush, so I clicked it. I wasn't wrong
    The metre is thrown here and there but that works to your advantage because you don't humdrum a poem of this nature into the reader. That's good, it makes them focus more on the topic at hand rather than the rhyme.
    The sentiment is reciprocated. Keep writing.
    | Posted on 2007-02-24 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      Food for thought.I like it.Not many people on here tackle political issues and I think this is done quite well.I was totally thrown by the title initially,I thought it might have sexual connotations but obviously I was wrong!The metre is a bit random but you include some subtle rhyming and it works.Totally agree with the sentiment also.
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by Asakura Cowboy | [ Reply to This ]

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