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    dots Submission Name: Long Island Pleasedots
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    Author: Jbills
    ASL Info:    30/m/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 57/68/29
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dotsLong Island Pleasedots
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    Hordes of me first minions
    Floods of vacant souls
    And the rank stench
    Of curbside toilet bowls

    Conflicted it seems
    Depicting scenes of drama
    For petty means

    Clarity is what I carry
    But these days
    Iím in a maze

    Leave behind
    Your untagged baggage
    And your grieving mind

    Accept that,
    Itís all cyclical

    The fickle,
    And the typical

    We destroy,
    And then enjoy

    We implode,
    When feelings erode

    Stables of stories
    Alter perception
    Big city heights
    Make the connection




    Submitted on 2007-02-20 06:20:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Clarity is sometimes the best thing for us to carry away from most situations. Thank you for sharing.
    | Posted on 2013-01-26 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]


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