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Submission Name:
Blank Statements Laced With True Concepts
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Author:
Jbills
ASL Info:
30/m/IL
Elite Ratio:
3.52 - 57/68/29
Words:
374
Class/Type:
Poetry/Love
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oh heartbreak, love, finality
Blank Statements Laced With True Concepts
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Tumultuous it seems
Two fucked up teens
Desperate for ascension
When words fail comprehension
Sharing no aspirations
Gives way to desecration
One wanted hope
The other sensation
Perspective cannot be lost
For the priceless cost, is devastating
Even for those constantly contemplating
Like my dear
Who never ceases to steer
Love evolved way beyond recognition
Before I knew it we had 2 cats and a kitchen
And as much as we kissed the egos were never swallowed
Such stagnation leaves the strongest hearts hollow
Your bipolar shoulder shrugs feel a little colder today
A familiar freeze frame in our love’s stained window pane
No courageous actions remain
You took the sun-soaked sane, and I get the retroactive rain
It’s something in my soul’s disposition
Premeditated anger at pre-medicated dangers
Twenty two years worth of dedicated hyper vision
Sacrificed on a suggested pill prescription
Reinvigorating vanity got me plagiarizing morbid happenings
Setting my own sun was never so over done
Zoloft religiously pumped the serotonin gun
And I thought corrosive narcotics got me spun
Alcoholic Black outs became part of the track route
Anxiety reduced, but more likely to lash out
I need 50 M-Gs a day to maneuver through stressor’s strays
Shank the infected jester germ until you master lesser ways
I was a Stationary distraction
A sorry soldier in the fed med faction
Dishonorably discharged cus I repeatedly risked hard
Determined to demolish my own demons with a cerebral fist art
Forgive me lover
For I know no other
To me, you lend to the season’s change
Conjuring up climaxes that made the seas rearrange
I used to think I was being modest
when I called you a goddess
I used to believe the mountain would be scaled
Now I couldn’t tell you what hot is
And I think I’ve finally bailed
Submitted on 2007-02-20 07:25:06
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Nice word choice. I loveee your style.
~FarFromSanityy~.
| Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by
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wow...yeah that would be the first word that comes to mind...i loved the word play...there isn't one part that i can complain about...and you had me at the title...excellent.
emily
| Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by
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