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    dots Submission Name: Blank Statements Laced With True Concepts dots
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    Author: Jbills
    ASL Info:    30/m/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 57/68/29
    Words: 374
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1008
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2560



    Description:
       oh heartbreak, love, finality


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    dotsBlank Statements Laced With True Concepts dots
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    Tumultuous it seems

    Two fucked up teens

    Desperate for ascension

    When words fail comprehension


    Sharing no aspirations

    Gives way to desecration

    One wanted hope

    The other sensation


    Perspective cannot be lost

    For the priceless cost, is devastating

    Even for those constantly contemplating

    Like my dear

    Who never ceases to steer


    Love evolved way beyond recognition

    Before I knew it we had 2 cats and a kitchen

    And as much as we kissed the egos were never swallowed

    Such stagnation leaves the strongest hearts hollow


    Your bipolar shoulder shrugs feel a little colder today

    A familiar freeze frame in our loveís stained window pane

    No courageous actions remain

    You took the sun-soaked sane, and I get the retroactive rain


    Itís something in my soulís disposition

    Premeditated anger at pre-medicated dangers

    Twenty two years worth of dedicated hyper vision

    Sacrificed on a suggested pill prescription


    Reinvigorating vanity got me plagiarizing morbid happenings

    Setting my own sun was never so over done

    Zoloft religiously pumped the serotonin gun

    And I thought corrosive narcotics got me spun


    Alcoholic Black outs became part of the track route

    Anxiety reduced, but more likely to lash out

    I need 50 M-Gs a day to maneuver through stressorís strays

    Shank the infected jester germ until you master lesser ways


    I was a Stationary distraction

    A sorry soldier in the fed med faction

    Dishonorably discharged cus I repeatedly risked hard

    Determined to demolish my own demons with a cerebral fist art


    Forgive me lover

    For I know no other

    To me, you lend to the seasonís change

    Conjuring up climaxes that made the seas rearrange


    I used to think I was being modest
    when I called you a goddess

    I used to believe the mountain would be scaled

    Now I couldnít tell you what hot is

    And I think Iíve finally bailed




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    ||| Comments |||
      Nice word choice. I loveee your style.

    ~FarFromSanityy~.
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by FarFromSanityy | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...yeah that would be the first word that comes to mind...i loved the word play...there isn't one part that i can complain about...and you had me at the title...excellent.
    emily
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by only_a_dreamX | [ Reply to This ]


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