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    dots Submission Name: Freedomdots

    Author: evangelina
    ASL Info:    23/f/macedonia
    Elite Ratio:    4.65 - 27/30/14
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       This is a bit "confused" poem at first sight and the interpunction is missing in purpose.

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    There is no brain in my head
    just a soft white cloud
    which is hiding the sun
    which is too bright and warm
    so it cannot spread its rays
    and touch the red flower
    whose petals are closed up
    and are not letting out the sleepy bug
    who spent the night there
    to go out and taste the Freedom

    Submitted on 2004-06-07 18:58:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked this poem. i loved the title. i would have changed some of the wording in the middle of this poem but that's just my opinion keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2004-06-07 00:00:00 | by lonely poet | [ Reply to This ]
      Awesome. I'm not predicting what this is about, only telling you what it reminds me of. It kind of draws me to think of how we sometimes feel like we are the cause for problems. Like your chain of events affect eachother. I haven't read many poems here *yet* but this is the best short poem I have read so far. Congrats dear.
    | Posted on 2004-06-07 00:00:00 | by Indi Elf | [ Reply to This ]

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