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    dots Submission Name: tear me downdots
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    Author: austin
    ASL Info:    22/ Male/ Odessa, Texas
    Elite Ratio:    4.41 - 376/396/84
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Angry
    Total Views: 845
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 948



    Description:
       a friend I thought I knew just has this thing with tearing people down to make himself look better...simply because of insecurity. Get over it fucker...You're 23 years old!!!


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    dotstear me downdots
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    A New Level!!

    This time, minus the last
    I won't be walking in the past
    for this, for you, for anything
    been trampelled on since I was old enough
    to know the disatisfaction in your sacrament

    Righteous, bloodthirst, ravenous hunger within
    You'll tear everyone else down around you
    just so you don't look so thin
    take advantage of everyone that took care of you

    so tear me down kid, tear me down
    i'll throw you out just like I took you in
    tear me down kid tear me down
    put your hands in pockets laden in sin

    kept my eyes on my back
    because of kids like you
    i will remain unscathed by your games
    the advantage of trusting few.

    so tear me down kid, tear me down.
    tear me down kid, tear me down
    I'll throw you out like i took you in.





    Submitted on 2007-02-20 11:33:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ugh, I cannot stand people who tear others down just to feel better about themselves. A lot of those type of people went to my high school so I'm hella glad that I'm not there anymore....lol "been trampelled on since I was old enough/to know the disatisfaction in your sacrament" That line, as simple as it might seem, is very powerful. I felt that. Good line.
    "take advantage of everyone that took care of you" Now, I know some people like that...and they are unfortunately members of my family.... :( I just wish people could grow the f up! You know?!
    I really like the chorus: "so tear me down kid, tear me down" < That part. I can totally hear that to some awesome guitar playing. :D
    All in all, nice job with this. And you do not need people who tear you down in your life so I say you tell them to screw off!
    Take care,
    beth
    | Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW Brent...I didn't know.
    I'll have to watch your lyrics from now on.
    Check out this member of Elite Skills.
    She's absolutely brilliant.
    Mandi Gayle.

    Let me know what you think.
    | Posted on 2007-02-23 00:00:00 | by theDevilsPocket | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice and this one had the good, wholesome F-Uness which makes perfect sense when dealing with people like this.

    HA!

    Love it!
    | Posted on 2007-02-22 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      oooooooh i like it. bitter. grrr. nice bit about throwing them out after you took them in. hits home in an ugly way.

    kudos

    ~rach
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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