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    dots Submission Name: Why Can't You See?dots
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    Author: Midnight Rain
    ASL Info:    15/M/Connecticut
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 18/16/5
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsWhy Can't You See?dots
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    I'm Standing here
    And I can't feel my soul

    It feels like the world's closing in
    And there's nowhere to hide

    Why can't you see
    You mean everything to me

    When I look in your eyes
    I see no disguise

    It feels cold inside
    Without you be my side

    Do you feel the same
    Or am I getting in your way

    Someone tell me what to do
    Because I am in love with you




    Submitted on 2007-02-20 11:48:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It seems to me that she need to be more observant. I really can relate to this poem. i like it.
    <3 Julia
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by black rose13 | [ Reply to This ]
      she's got your heart on a string dear. love is blind ...but sometimes it's hard of hearing too. so shout. let it all out. sweep her off her feet and even if she doesn't get it. everyone else will see.
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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