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Why Can't You See?

Author: Midnight Rain
ASL Info:    15/M/Connecticut
Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 18 /16 /5
Words: 80
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Why Can't You See?

I'm Standing here
And I can't feel my soul

It feels like the world's closing in
And there's nowhere to hide

Why can't you see
You mean everything to me

When I look in your eyes
I see no disguise

It feels cold inside
Without you be my side

Do you feel the same
Or am I getting in your way

Someone tell me what to do
Because I am in love with you

Submitted on 2007-02-20 11:48:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It seems to me that she need to be more observant. I really can relate to this poem. i like it.
<3 Julia
| Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by black rose13 | [ Reply to This ]
  she's got your heart on a string dear. love is blind ...but sometimes it's hard of hearing too. so shout. let it all out. sweep her off her feet and even if she doesn't get it. everyone else will see.
| Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]

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