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siren's call


Author: blu_kittin
ASL Info:    20/F/Garden of Eden
Elite Ratio:    6.15 - 711 /397 /207
Words: 170
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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written on a challenge from a friend to write of something other than a man that haunts my heart and soul, and so i wrote of a woman's shade that tempts a lover to her fold


siren's call



the frothy waves lapped at the shore
i sighed content, wanting nothing more
my bare toes sunk in the grainy sand
as i gazed out over the listless land
an ocean of silky cerulean blue
a parade of tides, ever true
i heard the sirens song echoing
against the sinking sun greatly glowing
i watched the sunb begin to fade
and that is when i saw the shade
a vision in gold against the blue sky
she called to me, her love a lie
as she tempted me with all her might
towards the shoreline in the inky night
her voice enclosed me in a web
of sultry fantasy and need
she moved away as the water ebbed
and wanting love, her words i did heed
and crawled after her over silken pillows
through harems of girls, thin as willows
over glowing coals alight and flaming
quite easily accepting my trial and taming
and so i followed her fearlessly to the shore
and so blindly i follow her ever more




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  Oh, this is heady stuff...a wonderful pace with some excellent rhyme and fine vocabulary here ... a tad reminiscent of "da Man", EA Poe, himself ... excellent poem ... bravo ... bravo ... bravo... michael
| Posted on 2007-03-05 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
  this is really good. well written and rhymed, (the rhyming changed for a couple of lines, after reading it a 2nd time i thought, it fitted in well)the subject is also an interesting one, i wrote a poem on the same subject, (she called to me, her love a lie, and so blindly i follow her ever more) my 2 favourite lines, it also finished the poem off well.nice poem. nice work
gerry
| Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]
  i really wish i had thought of writing about sirens...it's a really good idea and you pulled it off well...i enjoyed it and it had a good ending.
emily
| Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by only_a_dreamX | [ Reply to This ]


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