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    dots Submission Name: these pale blue eyesdots
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    Author: koolness
    ASL Info:    17/female/city of evil
    Elite Ratio:    2.58 - 80/106/56
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1083
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 370



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    These pale blue eyes are all I can see,
    I can't see beyond what lies infront of me.
    Trying to see past the lies you hide,
    The only th ing I can't do is try.
    I lokk past the bitterness and sorrow,
    Hoping there will ba a tomorrow.
    All I see are pale blue eyes infront of me,
    And my reflection looking back at me.




    Submitted on 2007-02-20 12:56:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really like this poem.
    It is really good and put together.
    It forms well and flows as well.
    | Posted on 2007-02-23 00:00:00 | by Dark Divinity | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with what Martin said... but it is a good write... keep it up...
    love ya
    lizzie
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by babygirl09 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm, I'm not sure if I follow this poem, but the idea I get from the poem, I can relate to. It sounds like you're in love/ or like someone maybe, but you can't get to them and they won't notice you. Or maybe, they lie to you all the time, and you can't stand the lies, so that is like a shield they have around him. I dunno, from what I get from it, very good write Katelin.

    Sincerely,
    Martin
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by Draigon | [ Reply to This ]


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