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    dots Submission Name: Aguished Cries of a Puppetdots
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    Author: Draigon
    ASL Info:    25/m/Al
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 164/196/91
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    dotsAguished Cries of a Puppetdots
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    Angry, pissed off taken
    to a profound new level.

    Sadness, sorrow taken
    to a different low

    Emotions, rule us
    control us like a puppetmaster
    controls the puppets.

    Slaves to emotion,
    we walk the world
    blind to everything

    Tis great,
    all we can taste,
    is the bitter taste
    of emotion.

    I am ruled by anger and depression,
    on this whole new level....




    Submitted on 2007-02-20 13:24:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      good poem mann. emotions rule us. they suck. cuz they can be very blinding.
    | Posted on 2007-02-22 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      I see lark's point with teh raw emotion, You speak of emotion, yet some of your other works better display it. Take a second glance at your punctuation: sometimes it's there sometimes not, be more consistant.

    We need to be really careful how far we let emotions take us, reason and logic are great tools that should be used to counter the overflow of anger and hate as well as love.

    ~orange
    | Posted on 2007-02-22 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
      i feel where your coming from on this and i believe that a lot of people can relate to it. but i believe you can put more into it. you clearly have all the emotion behind it but i still think it could use more of that raw emotion. id be intrested to see it. cheers!
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by lark | [ Reply to This ]
      This is preety good
    In this write I see an individual who is trying to find his own way in life but people continue to try to mold him into the person they feel is right for him
    I truthfully believe a person is never free until they spread their wings and enjoy the life that was destined for them not the phony life others have created
    EXCELLENT JOB!!!
    This write really made me think
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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