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    dots Submission Name: Kiss Medots
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    Author: The Conqueror
    ASL Info:    21/female/Missouri
    Elite Ratio:    3.48 - 178/204/42
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       If you have questions, ask me. I kinda threw this together with wierd emotions.


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    dotsKiss Medots
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    Kiss me under the fairest moon
    that glitters pale in adherent eyes

    Kiss me underneath the stars
    that suspend themselves in clear, black skies

    Kiss me under summer's night
    that's air is balmy, warm

    Kiss me if those stars should fall
    then kiss me through the storm

    Kiss me under all the grey
    that forms above our lives

    Kiss me under lightning flash
    that looks like sharpening knives

    Kiss me under shaded clouds
    that rumble with internal strain

    Kiss me if that cloud should burst
    then kiss me in the rain







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      I love this. I like how you linked them together.
    My one sugestion-
    Seperate it differently, since you have it going together so perfectly you should make the verses fit that perfection!

    Kiss me under the fairest moon
    That glitters pale in adherent eyes
    Kiss me underneath the stars
    That suspend themselves in clear, black skies

    Kiss me under summer's night
    Thatís air is balmy, warm
    Kiss me if those stars should fall
    Then kiss me through the storm

    Kiss me under all the grey
    That forms above our lives
    Kiss me under lightning flash
    That looks like sharpening knives

    Kiss me under shaded clouds
    That rumble with internal strain
    Kiss me if that cloud should burst
    Then kiss me in the rain


    -Shadow Doll
    PS- I love how simple this is! - Not always, but once in awhile we need just a simple understandable poem, that touches our soul.
    | Posted on 2008-04-04 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is sooo good! What could be more inspiring than a kiss, and a poem about a kiss is terriffic!

    'Kiss me if that cloud should burst
    then kiss me in the rain'

    Fantastic ending to a delightful poem!!!
    | Posted on 2008-04-04 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      A kiss is something that has been written about many times. You captured the essence of it superbly well.

    Your form, structure and rhyme is quite superb.

    On the face of it, a simple little rhyming tribute to a kiss - but this has been crafted with skill and class.

    Great stuff from you once again.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2007-04-27 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is exceptionally fine ... (I have a suspicion that you read a great deal of poetry which is a GOOD thing, as many people simply don't read the old masters, which is a huge mistake) ... the last 10 or so lines are really quite excellent ... (may I make a humble suggestion? if you were to have the same number of syllables in each line--say, perhaps 8--the poem, I believe, would be much improved.) bravo ... bravo ... bravo ... michael
    | Posted on 2007-03-16 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      A kiss is fine thing indeed. If a kiss doesn't make the gray go away then you kissing the wrong person. A simple elegant poem. bravo.
    | Posted on 2007-02-23 00:00:00 | by The Wise Fool | [ Reply to This ]
      wow! I really love this piece i needn't say much more
    accept; don't mind if i ad it to favs.

    beautiful piece, totally beautiful
    | Posted on 2007-02-21 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]


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