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    dots Submission Name: Frozen Butterflydots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsFrozen Butterflydots
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    As the blank white snow drifts to the ground,
    Flakes floating dodging all around,
    A single frozen butterfly flutters without a sound.
    This puny insect has been raging for days,
    With all itís strength in the snow it will not lay,
    Resting it can not commit only aim south toward a warmer bay.
    Itís wings are crystalline and shimmering,
    The only thought that keeps him going is the warm desire lingering,
    Each flake against his body stinger-ing.
    This brave bug will never see a great butterfly throng,
    Itís wings canít hold out for long,
    The butterfly crashes into the snow where it belongs,
    And for him I wrote this Butterfly Requiem song.




    Submitted on 2004-01-31 13:23:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A very beautiful poem. I love the first three lines. May want to try to shorten the eighth line, however. Otherwise, great job.
    | Posted on 2004-02-02 00:00:00 | by Scribner | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't find it humorous, nor sad, nor sweet, but rather thought provoking. Nice write.
    A butterfly always presents an interesting image, as does snow (and all things like it). A butterfly is fragile an snow is cold. Fragile yet cold....

    Great write. Favorites list, definitely.
    | Posted on 2004-01-31 00:00:00 | by JKPS613 | [ Reply to This ]
      poor poor butterfly.... humorous.... individually different.... i like this... nice job
    | Posted on 2004-01-31 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]


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