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    dots Submission Name: Like OMG! It's such a stupid saying.dots
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    Author: black rose13
    ASL Info:    16/f/where do I live?
    Elite Ratio:    1.35 - 137/97/39
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Misc/I hate you
    Total Views: 631
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 611



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    dotsLike OMG! It's such a stupid saying.dots
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    There's someting about you that just bothers me.
    i know you're tired of trying to explain yourself. So why don't you just listen.

    Time for you to see your not the pretty little thing you were in high school.

    Do you understand what I'm trying to say?
    You ridiculed so many people.
    And just look at you now.
    Karma's a bitch isn't it?

    Time ofr you to see that you're not the pretty little thing you were in high school.

    So now it's time for you to get a grasp on reality and GET A LIFE!




    Submitted on 2007-02-20 18:04:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that's it girl. i know who this one goes out to. this is probably the safest place to tell your mother to f*** herself. i know you put up wth so much of her petty s**t. i love your repeat.

    "Time for you to see that you're not the pretty little thing you were in high school."

    and deffinatly your last real stanza.
    | Posted on 2007-02-21 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      i dont know wat this fool is talkin about but its a good piece
    | Posted on 2007-02-21 00:00:00 | by TwistedMinded | [ Reply to This ]
      I didn't like the last line, or the "do you understand - [censored] isn't it" line. The rest I thought was pretty good. Your style defintley is not one I feel I can relate to. You have a very "urban", almost "get out of ma face" kind of style. It is incredibly unique, but so different that not many people will really be able to relate to it. Perhaps you can try, over time, to keep your own unique style, which I find quite charming, and adapt it to a more formidable style, one that is still yours, full of that attitude, but more general, more flow of the mind. I think your writing style has alot of potential, and will be checking back with you to see how it turns out over the months and years.
    | Posted on 2007-02-21 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]


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