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    dots Submission Name: Cupid's Tearsdots
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    Author: Twice
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 71/82/52
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsCupid's Tearsdots
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    Mesmerized
    Hypmotized
    Distorted landscape
    as rain paints
    my window
    I dream
    of seamless stockings
    silk and sandy
    lead to high thigh
    and dissappear under
    umbrella skies
    5 fingers slide
    to crease and glide
    soft against your most
    sensitive skin
    We begin the sin
    10 thumbs
    please you as one
    fill your lungs
    let it out
    with pouts and shouts
    bitten lips
    and sunkin ships
    a treasures found
    in the simple sounds
    of rain against my
    window paine.







    Submitted on 2007-02-20 18:20:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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