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Submission Name:
Dunno yet (not completed)
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Author:
Brat05
ASL Info:
15/f/australia
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3.13 - 86/60/28
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39
Class/Type:
Poetry/Depressed
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Umm i really dont know, any advice wood me much appreciated!
Dunno yet (not completed)
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Behind my smile I cry,
While inside I slowly die.
And you belive me when I say I'm fine,
And believe my fakely shine.
Oh what a great friend you are,
To notice my life is an emotional scar.
Submitted on 2007-02-20 18:40:36
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wow. SPEECHLESS! It's so sad:(
| Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by
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