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Submission Name: Dunno yet (not completed) dots

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Author:	Brat05
ASL Info:	15/f/australia
Elite Ratio:	3.13 - 86/60/28
Words:	39

Class/Type:	Poetry/Depressed
Total Views:	699
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	229

Description:
Umm i really dont know, any advice wood me much appreciated!

Dunno yet (not completed) dots

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Behind my smile I cry,
While inside I slowly die.
And you belive me when I say I'm fine,
And believe my fakely shine.
Oh what a great friend you are,
To notice my life is an emotional scar.

Submitted on 2007-02-20 18:40:36 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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wow. SPEECHLESS! It's so sad:(
| Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by black rose13 | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.