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    dots Submission Name: Disengagedots
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    Author: Jbills
    ASL Info:    30/m/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 57/68/29
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 759
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 465



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    dotsDisengagedots
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    Unable to reach you
    Beauty so forbidden
    Cut off from every angle,
    I disengage from the strangle

    A sacrifice subject to be seen as selfish

    A decision,
    Dissected,
    With a rejected love connected

    Thoughts dwell on preventable circumstances

    Emotionally weak
    Regrets swell
    Insecurities seep
    I wither,
    Cus Iím not with her






    Submitted on 2007-02-21 02:37:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it. A new take on love. I especially the first stanza. It really grabbed my attention and I loved how you described it as being cut off at every angle. That it is so impossible to love her, even though you must, and you continue to pursue it. Its nice, and a sweet notion. Good write. And I am sorry I havent been able to give you any advice in my comments, lol. They are just so good! haha.
    -Randee
    | Posted on 2007-04-22 00:00:00 | by UnderlinedInRed | [ Reply to This ]


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