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    dots Submission Name: High Schooldots
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    Author: Jbills
    ASL Info:    30/m/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 57/68/29
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dotsHigh Schooldots
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    Squirmin’ vermin
    Please sit still for the sermon

    Here’s to,
    Seeing cherries in your rear view
    Breaking the law,
    And taking it raw
    If you wanna kill the camel,
    It takes more than one straw.

    Look under my blunder,
    Pain drained my thunder
    3rd degree sunburn,
    Reached my heart,
    And tore it apart.




    Submitted on 2007-02-21 02:39:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it's how it is...in high school we go full speed ahead, reckless abandon...live life on the edge, then we age and get cautious, careful, slow.

    until we are a no go....i really liked the rhythm of this piece. and catchy wording.

    a definite keeper.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-07-02 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      haha its great. Made me laugh because I know exactly what it means. When you say "Here's to" it almost immediatly draws me in to see if I can relate. Really really enjoyed it, because it is too true. No critiques, its short, simple and laughable.

    -Randee
    | Posted on 2007-02-24 00:00:00 | by UnderlinedInRed | [ Reply to This ]


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