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    dots Submission Name: cloudy with a chance of electricity.dots

    Author: Melora
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 175/198/128
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       the beginning of alex's perspective.

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    dotscloudy with a chance of electricity.dots

    My body doesnít usually cry out for New York this early in the morning. I guess sometimes you just need to wake up to skyscrapers and traffic. Iím not the pining type, but something about the way the stars were scattered last night made me yearn for them to be overshadowed by a sky strung with city lights. Cloudy with a chance of electricity. And maybe, if we're lucky, we'll get showered with sparks.

    Submitted on 2007-02-21 06:23:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Who is Alex? Is this something in a previous piece I haven't read? Probably...

    It seems odd, someone pining for New York. New York isn't the greatest city in the world to live in...but I guess people love what they are used to.

    "And maybe, if we're lucky, we'll get showered with sparks."

    That line is electrifyingly beautiful. Heh, I know what I said sounds stupid. But, I love that line. I just don't know how to explain it.

    Interesting soliloquy. And the use of italics shows that it is inward thoughts. An inward soliloquy.

    I need to find out who Alex is. And I shall.

    Keep up the good writing!
    | Posted on 2007-10-25 00:00:00 | by AsiaticFox | [ Reply to This ]
      Yay! We get to hear Alex now.

    I really liked the "i'm not the pining type" because that's so different from my own point of view. Very real.

    And the "cloudy with a chance of electricity" is just brilliant.

    | Posted on 2007-02-22 00:00:00 | by drowning_queen | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this too. I like the whole, "I wake up yearning something..." idea. Because I've never heard that or it seems interesting to me.
    I really would like to read more. :'D
    | Posted on 2007-02-21 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this
    To me New York is the Worlds Greatest city
    I go there at least 2 times a week to just look around or catch a Rangers or Knicks or Mets game
    New York has a feeling in it that definately invigorates my soul
    I Love that city
    You did an excellent job with this
    I will be looking for more writes from you
    God Bless

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    | Posted on 2007-02-21 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the different approach/honesty. cause everyone is all about open skies and beautiful stars yet there is a kind of ambiance about the big city people tend to overlook. Woooo
    | Posted on 2007-02-21 00:00:00 | by lark | [ Reply to This ]

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