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    dots Submission Name: Jane Came Backdots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Misc/Satire
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    dotsJane Came Backdots

    when the wind blew this morning
    hair fell into my mouth
    a dismal air of hollow thought went right through me
    I'm scattered now
    terribly confused
    I love you all so completely
    I think happier times would be upon us all if I would just disappear

    or maybe give in
    break the branch that holds me

    maybe give up
    let go of the sky

    and it does seem so hard to wrap my hands around the sky
    Instead I should be falling down into her
    feeling my way towards space
    what is this stupid thought
    not sure if I should wrap my fingers round it

    but this wind was sent to me
    and I can't help but see a taunting pattern
    fractals in the tress make it all seem so obviously true

    that breaking a limb, that holds me
    or free falling into an endless amount of time
    would be foolish
    my heart is malicious
    ill intent wishes I cut her from my chest
    her sickness infects me
    tells my brain
    she is
    and not Jazmine

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      Not much to say because this is absoulty beautiful.
    By far, my most favorite.

    Great Write!

    | Posted on 2007-04-04 00:00:00 | by necrotic | [ Reply to This ]
      "when the wind blew this morning
    hair fell into my mouth
    a dismal air of hollow thought went right through me
    I'm scattered now
    terribly confused
    I love you all so completely
    I think happier times would be upon us all if I would just disappear"

    I think that this is really pretty. And sad. And I like it. And I wish I had someone to blame all my craziness on. I need someone...I think.

    Anywho...I like this poem.
    | Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a very personal peice which is very uncharacteristic of you and that sort of worries me, but perhaps its time that you let out the things that eat at you instead of helping me with mine.....
    i really do wonder at the sanity, dear, but that is not my place to pry or comment....reality is blissfully skewed....

    and perhaps your right, perhaps it is a genetic thing that drags you into this mire of special-ness.....

    but at least your sort of happy with your set and life and you did quite exquisitly well on this piece.

    | Posted on 2007-02-21 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm, very good Jazmine, but it seems a little unlike you to write something like this. It sounds like a little bit of splite personalities mixed with suicidal tendencies. Not sure.... Anyway, good write, it struck as kind of odd though as I read farther into it. And I just saw it was satirical, so that may be the reason, lol.
    | Posted on 2007-02-21 00:00:00 | by Draigon | [ Reply to This ]

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