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    dots Submission Name: Still Weakdots

    Author: EsCaPisT
    ASL Info:    17,Female,Singapore
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 42/38/38
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsStill Weakdots

    I feel the strength of your arms
    Seeping through my skin
    As they wrapped tightly around me
    Yet it still made me weak

    Vulnerable, ready to topple
    Your strength could not hold me steady
    I silently thought to myself..
    ''Is it too little?
    Is it not enough?''

    Then i realised what was missing
    Your arms gave me strength i wanted
    But not the love i needed

    The substance i need to move on with my life
    The elixir i need to believe in myself
    The piece i need to complete myself
    The only strength i need from you
    But couldn't find in your arms.

    That's why i'm still weak.
    Still flowing with my tears of sadness
    Still flowing with the beads of sweat of my struggle
    Because you couldn't hold me steady.
    Because of your lack of love.

    Submitted on 2007-02-21 09:17:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      wow hope that my girl never feels like that towards me thatd ruin everything
    overall I could understand the write
    | Posted on 2007-03-11 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]
      it seems unfinished....like the last line just doesnt quite close it well, but thats just my opinion but other than that i thought it was very good and well structured
    | Posted on 2007-03-07 00:00:00 | by Master Bates | [ Reply to This ]

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