[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: Defineddots

    Author: Lyrikz
    ASL Info:    16/Female/Ash Fork
    Elite Ratio:    2.08 - 4/8/10
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
    Total Views: 574
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1300

       This was written originally for a challenge on "The Definition of Character"

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    A mystery
    A puzzle
    Something with a lock
    No key
    No combo
    Leaving you for lost
    Thats me
    Mildy unkind
    So cursed
    So blessed
    Yet to be defined

    A threat
    A thrill
    Someone just so cold
    To kiss
    To kill
    Teasing oh so bold
    Thats you
    But more to be outlined
    Your taste
    Your touch
    You've yet to be defined

    So sweet
    Tenderly she trusts
    Trusts you
    Trusts me
    Simply she trusts us
    Thats her
    She's there
    She's gone and left to find
    She loves
    She swears
    She's yet to be defined

    We three
    Us too
    A tangled web of sin
    It seems
    We loose
    Us nor her will win
    Our stories
    Our hell
    Our very hearts entwined
    We're human
    We fail
    We've yet to be defined

    They pass
    They judge
    They think they understand
    But I
    Won't budge
    Who has the upper hand
    Not us
    Not them
    But our God divine
    Our World
    All sin
    Yet to be defined

    Submitted on 2007-02-21 15:29:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      Absolutely loved it, I like the rhythm!
    | Posted on 2007-02-23 00:00:00 | by SammySueYou | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]