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    dots Submission Name: Suicidedots
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    Author: Depression420
    ASL Info:    25/M/KY
    Elite Ratio:    1.23 - 70/70/18
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    dotsSuicidedots
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    I tried over dosing myself
    But I did not have enough pills
    I tried jumping off a building
    But the police stopped me
    I tried a knife to the heart
    But I missed by an inch
    I tried burning my house down
    With only me inside
    But the fire department pulled me out
    I have not tried a gun yet
    Because I can not buy one
    For I am only sixteen




    Submitted on 2007-02-21 15:44:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      WOW, every one who reads will probily hate me for this, but id get mad if obsticals stood in my way like so many did for you!...15.
    | Posted on 2008-03-14 00:00:00 | by being me | [ Reply to This ]
      Aww. noooooo. Don't kill yourself. You're too awesome to waste away like that. nooooooo.

    I love you,
    <3 black rose
    | Posted on 2007-04-22 00:00:00 | by black rose13 | [ Reply to This ]
      nicely written... But are you planning on trying to kill yourself? Hopefully not.. Personally it's kinda pointless... and I agree with Katlord, life's too short, why shorten it even more?
    *Lizzie*
    | Posted on 2007-04-18 00:00:00 | by babygirl09 | [ Reply to This ]
      I hope your not really going to kill yourself but I do like the peom. Life too short as is why shorten it more.
    | Posted on 2007-04-05 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm worried about u, but i like how this is written.
    | Posted on 2007-03-21 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I like how its written. But its kind of depressing. Good work though.
    | Posted on 2007-03-20 00:00:00 | by emoxday | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow I like it, nice work I like the visual and how it felt real and especially with emotion, I like this poem alot I hope to read more from you as I hope you will read from me anyways, again you did a good job, keep it up peace & stay safe.... -Cordell
    | Posted on 2007-03-07 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok You suck both at writing AND killing yourself?
    | Posted on 2007-02-22 00:00:00 | by Korras | [ Reply to This ]
      baby thats rough. ur in the middle of a dark tunnel and if you give up now you'll never know if that bright light is a train. besides if you've got that much luck you should play cards. i sincerely hope you are'nt being serious about killing yourself.
    | Posted on 2007-02-21 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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