This start is not bad although it feels like the lines have a "clipped" feeling to them, almost like this is an outline done in bullet format. Perhaps you could work on that a little to make it read a bit smoother. Just a thought on my part!
You got a really good start here
If I were you I would add to the peacefulness of this write and maybe create a story ogf Love found on a cruiseship
I like the lines you created they are very poetic
Just adda little more and this write will be just as good as the other writes I have read of yours
Hmmm...it does have potential. Almost puts the reader on a cruise ship but fails to do that in this shortened state. You definately have a good start and it would be very interesting to see how you continue it.