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    dots Submission Name: "Vodka Rant"dots
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    Author: Drifting Star
    ASL Info:    19/F/Somewhere
    Elite Ratio:    2.02 - 22/101/73
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Rant/Venting
    Total Views: 716
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 822



    Description:
       A rant...toward a former lover.

    Far from Elite...

    -Sennie.


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    dots"Vodka Rant"dots
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    While I'm still sober, let me say this...
    Understanding the pattern is the key...
    Context is all....
    Look for illumination,
    see past the illiteration.

    ((Some Many Drinks Later))

    ...My hands clench and unclench,
    an unfortunate state of anger...
    ...Secret thoughts broil in my mind,
    spilling off my tongue like hemlock...
    ...Agent of Evil-- tempts me to speak,
    but all I can say is "sorry" and "cheater"...
    ...Lover, we are always friends...
    even when I'd like to slap you once or twice...
    ...Man...I could use a drink...
    got any vodka on ya?

    Damn blighted copy cat,
    bringing up memories of the past...

    What the hell were you thinking?




    Submitted on 2007-02-21 17:59:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      *giggles*
    need I say anything else?
    | Posted on 2007-05-11 00:00:00 | by Nearby Thoughts | [ Reply to This ]
      at first I didn't like this, it seemed boring without much to it. However! as it advanced i got into the mind a bit, i felt confused and disoriented, wanting a drink, more was revealed about your state of mind, and I actually liked it alot, like alot alot, which isn't incredibly common for me.

    I think if you got rid of or edited the first part to fit more with a disasociated drunken angry confused mindset like the rest, in the more "hey, this is how it is" upset drunk style, and then perhaps advanced it a bit more, this could really be an amazing piece.
    | Posted on 2007-02-22 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]


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