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    dots Submission Name: Limbodots
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    Author: Jbills
    ASL Info:    30/m/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 57/68/29
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 846
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 618



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    dotsLimbodots
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    Dwelling on boredom swelling

    Gotta alter the notion

    Should be past this

    The audience is classless

    Immediately surrounded by…

    The nappy, misguided, and hauntingly happy

    Fixtures in a grandiose scheme

    -Manipulated-

    All for the American dream

    Gen Eds are overrated

    A tired and mired theme

    All for the future I’m slated

    Where’s the focus? Where’s the hope?

    It’s inside you

    Falling down the slope





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      oooo I like it. Seems like I am sitting beside you watching a play of some sort which seems so disgustingly off, and the audience is lapping it all up. I dont know, thats just the image which came up. But anyways, I really did enjoy it. And I dont have any suggestions, great write and it was fun to read.
    -Randee
    | Posted on 2007-04-22 00:00:00 | by UnderlinedInRed | [ Reply to This ]


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