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    dots Submission Name: A knight of olddots
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    Author: Dark Divinity
    ASL Info:    20 Male Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 23/20/8
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 1044
    Average Vote:    3.3333
    Bytes: 724



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       I suspect youll get what this is about. I wrote it a little while ago. I really hope ya like it. Peace!


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    dotsA knight of olddots
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    A knight of old,
    Walk this path.
    Armor ice cold,
    A sword’s wrath.

    He looks ahead,
    To see his fate.
    A sword covered in red,
    "Is this deaths weight?"

    Falling to his knees,
    and starting to cry,
    As he gets seized.
    "Am I going to die?"

    They hold him tight,
    Accuse him wrong.
    Saying "this isn’t right,"
    As the crow sings his death song.


    They lock him away,
    The executer comes.
    Is this the day?
    While hearing the drums.

    No one cries,
    Yet he feels no offend.
    He close his eyes,
    As it all ends.




    Submitted on 2007-02-21 18:47:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey this was a really good poem I love all the emotion that you expressed through out the whole poem and the great imagery of him falling to his knees was excellent kind of reminds me of the movie gladiator except the honorable soldier dies. Good job on this one.

    much LOVE
    James
    | Posted on 2007-02-27 00:00:00 | by James Reyna | [ Reply to This ]
      Simple, perfectly set rhyme scheme and original subject matter. I really like this one. I think I am favoriting it. :) The only thing I would change is the 'death song' part. It throws the rhythm off a little bit.
    Good work!
    | Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by awastedsky | [ Reply to This ]
      This one is really good. i tried to write like i normally do but im to depressed to write anything good. this sucks!
    | Posted on 2007-02-23 00:00:00 | by LightEternity | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this write. I like the sword's wrath and death's weight. I also like the imagry of the red sword.

    *kate
    | Posted on 2007-02-22 00:00:00 | by koolness | [ Reply to This ]
      This should be deep or something. You got turned down by a chick or what?
    | Posted on 2007-02-22 00:00:00 | by Korras | [ Reply to This ]
      very good write. what did you want people to get from this? it sounds to me you gave up on something. i was just curious. I really like this.

    <3 Julia
    | Posted on 2007-02-21 00:00:00 | by black rose13 | [ Reply to This ]
      very good write. what did you want people to get from this? it sounds to me you gave up on something. i was just curious. I really like this.

    <3 Julia
    | Posted on 2007-02-21 00:00:00 | by black rose13 | [ Reply to This ]


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