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    dots Submission Name: To love a Goddots

    Author: Amanda Lynn
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 332/193/56
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsTo love a Goddots

    He was a God living among men,
    trading his Olympus for a gentle look within.
    Searching the skies and the seas,
    searching everywhere,
    looking for me.
    His home eluded him,
    his love remained caged,
    his lineage deluded him
    and alone I raged.
    A witch in angle clothing,
    my horns hidden well.
    Living in self loathing,
    my wings broken where I fell.
    He was a God among men
    and he never looked down on me
    I was alone living within,
    waiting for my chance to be.

    Submitted on 2007-02-21 22:12:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think what I love most about this write is that, to me, it looks like you've taken a cliché and made it your own. A perfect boy and the girl who thinks she can't get him for whatever number of reasons. You convey the emotions that go with your story really well, and I think this is the kind of thing readers really like, just because a lot of people can relate to it in one way or another.
    | Posted on 2007-02-24 00:00:00 | by Venia | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really great! i was drawn in by the title and the poem was spectacular!! this is another fave. and its so unique, ive never read something like this. great job amanda
    | Posted on 2007-02-23 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! i really like this write,
    such i beautiful honesty, sounds like you have a great spiritual connection,
    good job,
    | Posted on 2007-02-22 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]

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