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Author: thewantedwords
ASL Info:    28 male sydney
Elite Ratio:    0.35 - 40 /40 /37
Words: 62
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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a smile i see is a smile thats worth,
making us bright upon the earth,
a handshake is done what can we say,
good to see you on this real fine day,
a hug is good shows you care,
with the smile no need to stare,
all im saying no need to combust,
with these actions is a virtue to trust.

Submitted on 2007-02-21 23:01:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I love your rhyming scheme! It made the whole piece flow together flawlessly.
I enjoyed it :)
| Posted on 2007-02-23 00:00:00 | by Nihilum | [ Reply to This ]
  so from an smile could tell the trust of somebody if thats the case then i can trust an smile of mine, tyson
| Posted on 2007-02-22 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]

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