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    dots Submission Name: Another Nightdots
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    Author: Ishtar
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 19/24/15
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsAnother Nightdots
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    From the small slender silences,
    To the quaking of unbearable speech
    Your voice was always within me,

    Wisdom evolving was never lacking in the treads of our conversations,
    All of your thoughts would descend on my skin,

    And map themselves like stories in the archives of my living wounds,
    Ancestral flesh tattooed and given as a gift

    To my restless bones in order to provoke movement and stave off the paralysis,
    That infects my limbs each night in brazen solidarity as I wait for you.




    Submitted on 2007-02-21 23:21:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think this is beautiful. It's written very cleverly with a really good choice of words.
    My favourite is:

    "All of your thoughts would descend on my skin,

    And map themselves like stories in the archives of my living wounds"

    into my fave's this goes

    peace and love
    | Posted on 2007-02-22 00:00:00 | by foxy lee | [ Reply to This ]


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