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    Author: Jessica Lynn
    ASL Info:    22/f/mn
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 121/119/57
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Way back when I was young,
    I thought of a song that was soon to be sung,
    I remembered things I had never done.
    I thought it was a game and I was having fun.

    Soon this gift became a burden.
    My being was haunted but I continued learning.
    By dreams and nightmares, these images were burning.
    I wished and wanted, and tortured by this yearning.

    These emotions I didn't understand from where they came.
    When I heard stories, I felt the same.
    What is this feeling, this unforgiving pain?
    What are these images, calling out my name?




    Submitted on 2007-02-22 11:48:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i dont understand the message.
    its too mysterious, like your trying
    to hide something.
    | Posted on 2007-02-27 00:00:00 | by Impy | [ Reply to This ]
      This write I really like
    You carried the rhyme scheme very well and made this write into a youthful expression of how life was when we were young
    Excellent Job with this!!!
    Ans also let me be one of the first to Welcome you to Elite Skills
    I hope this site brings you all the joy it has brought to me

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    | Posted on 2007-02-22 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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