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    dots Submission Name: Single Wish...dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 233
    Class/Type: Story/Serious
    Total Views: 691
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    Bytes: 1843



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       mmm lots on my mind nevertheless i long for this to happen to you and I .. You know who I speak of...


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    dotsSingle Wish...dots
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    I wish we could do
    What NO two people can do...
    And that is
    Trade lives
    Feel what I feel
    And allow me to feel
    The things you do not mention.
    Trade shoes
    Just for a day!
    Do you think that would be long enough?
    To get our point across to one another
    You try so hard
    You shed all these tears
    As you pray to God and hope that one day
    I'll understand
    As for me,
    I grab this mask, reluctantly
    Dust it off

    (For it has not been in use)

    Put it on, and cover up
    What pain's me the most
    Hold back all I want to release.
    See,
    I need to get things straight for myself
    What I long for in life, I had!
    And that was...
    What we had
    That relation we built on
    Can't you see?
    I didn't want it to go away
    I did not want things to end
    The way they have
    But these events

    (That has taken place)

    These people

    (My family)

    Has put their foot down
    In unknowingly ways!
    Which has made me make a choice...?
    That is..
         This mask belongs with me
         And what I long for
         What I desire
         Cannot happened for me right now

    Otherwise... We'd be together!




    Submitted on 2007-02-22 12:16:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was a good piece. i like reading what you write because i can relate to almost all of it. ive written a lot of things that i havent put on here because im afraid of what people might say because sometimes some people just dont understand. good write

    cRaZy
    | Posted on 2007-03-12 00:00:00 | by crazyinsane | [ Reply to This ]
      wow,that was a truly beutifuly created piece,i really liked it,i could feel the pain,yet the realazation that it had to be was there to ,it was a very mature piece,i also enjoyed the mask part,anyone who has felt pain inside can relate to to that we all hide it with some type of mask....
    | Posted on 2007-03-01 00:00:00 | by thehiddenone | [ Reply to This ]
      This piece read very joyfull for some reason. I totally understand the 'mask' situation. This piece, although different, read very well. good job
    | Posted on 2007-02-24 00:00:00 | by JAcksonJr | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a beautiful piece of truth Jackz, well expressed,
    I can't say much more than I really enjoyed it
    | Posted on 2007-02-24 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]


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