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    dots Submission Name: Words of Winterdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Prose/Nature
    Total Views: 424
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    Description:
       Happy Day ES!

    Watching winter out the window


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    dotsWords of Winterdots
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    Come and warm
    by the fire
    and view
    winter's
    window
    of a chill
    and still
    day

    Color hangs
    amidst
    more barren
    limb structure
    of season
    and reason
    stay

    To welcome
    in the cold
    as "IT" will
    stop
    a visit
    with sleepy
    lands
    holding of hands
    lay

    Dormant
    in growth
    each a shelter
    in life,
    time
    rhyme
    play




    Submitted on 2007-02-22 12:34:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Cute Write, Tiffany,
    This was short and sweet and you did give it a little meter, which made it quite an enjoyable read! Good description of a wintry world viewed from one's window.....winter certainly is my favourite season... Good Piece! : )
    Have a nice day! : )
    | Posted on 2007-05-24 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really beautiful Tiff
    I too Love the winter
    Though it is cold it seems the winter brings Family closer together so they may share their beautiful life together
    Thank You for sharing this
    GREAT WORK!!!
    God Bless
    Your Friend
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Winter
    Almost peaceful in its dreariness
    A soft wind blows
    Later to be followed by the howling
    Everything is white and grey and brown
    And in between
    Inside, warm I am
    Staring out at the winter storm
    Falling like whiteout on a writing mistake
    Making visibility nil

    I do not wish to go out
    I wish to stay warm in home
    But I have priorities away
    And must journey once again
    Into the almost peaceful dreariness
    Winter

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    One great poem deserves another. Thanks Tiff for being a major inspiration! Keep it up!

    | Posted on 2007-03-02 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]
      Winter, where no man has gone before,
    The final frontier....

    Close the door, Mabel, it's freezing! And I'm getting covered in snow! Quick!

    I despise winter. I wish I could kill it and maim it and shoot it and hang it and poison it and remove it from existence entirely in some nasty, violent way it....

    Despite the fact that I don't like winter, I think your poem brought a winter day to life. Winter drops snow, which makes driving and visiting people hard, and
    " "IT" will
    stop
    a visit
    with sleepy
    lands
    holding of hands
    lay"

    Personally, I wish winter would take a hike. But I feel way opposite about your poem. It is another masterpiece, a masterpiece in white and cold.

    Keep on writing!
    | Posted on 2007-03-02 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]
      hey hi and hoz things i like yor post but i am getting tired of winter
    in some areas here in canada we have 10 feet of snow and its been cold
    Spring is just around the corner i hope

    thanx for yor comment and i hope all is good for you

    sandman
    | Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      I love winter and for me it becomes a time of rebirth, rest and rejuvenation and I enjoyed the way you formed your poem. The way it reads reflects the thought and emotion behind it.
    | Posted on 2007-02-23 00:00:00 | by Ishtar | [ Reply to This ]
      Your 'Words Of Winter' are charmingly endearing, and you have captured very well, what we all do....sit and look out of the window, as Winter comes our way, with all it's splendour.

    I found this a very dreamy poem, and after I read it, I looked out of my window.

    Great stuff from you....and long overdue.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2007-02-22 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an excellent write tiff, it expresses soooo much of what i was trying to capture, but as always u find the perfect words that speak volumes.
    | Posted on 2007-02-22 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]
      neat and nifty poem here ... you make the short lines work wonderfully well... a fine poem about the winter, splendid evern ... bravo ... bravo ...bravo..
    | Posted on 2007-02-22 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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